(a work of fiction)
One day we went camping at Banff. It was as beautiful as a flower.
We started to pitch up our tent when, BOOM! It started to rain. There was lightning and thunder when suddenly, BOOM!
Then we saw some light and some smoke. There was a forest fire! Luckily there was rain to put the fire out. But the bad news is that there’s lightning and thunder. It was as scary as a bear trying to kill me and eat me. Then we put on some special clothes and went to investigate what was going on.
When we got there two people where hurt. I rushed back to the tent and called 9~1~1. There was no answer. I got some emergency stuff and ran back to the fire. I told Mum and Dad “I tried to call 9~1~1 but it didn’t work because the power line is broken”. I said as well, “I got some emergency stuff from the tent to help these people out!”. We did our best to help them and it worked.
They said to us, “Thank you for helping us!”.
We replied, “Your welcome.”.
I made an announcement, “Let’s get this fire out!”. Then we got to work. We did our best to get the fire out and it worked.
My family said to the two people, “Do you want to come to our tent and warm up?”.
They answered, “Yes!”.
They came to our tent and warmed up and asked, “Can we come to your house?”.
We answered, “Yes!”.
Then they came to our house and we lived happily ever after with the two people.
The End!
Fire photo courtesy of Stephen John Bryde Design
Awesome writing Caleb!! And yippee…I was first to comment. 🙂 I absolutely LOVE your use of quotation marks and the descriptive words you used. Great job! It made me feel as though I was there camping with you because of how wonderful your writing was.
Love from Mum
xoxo
Wow Caleb……..what a fantastic story !!
I could almost feel that I was actually there camping with you, sharing in all the excitement.
I loved the way you described things like “beatuiful as a flower.”
Love Gran x x
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Hey Caleb – great story! It kept my interest the whole way. I wanted to keep reading right to the end to find out what was going to happen next.
Have you written any other stories? I’d love to read them too.
love you lots,
Grandma
I forgot to mention that I really enjoy the photos that you add to your postings. It makes your entries even more interesting.